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Originally Posted by tammerz  okay a weak attempt at poetry:
The crowd looks on in anticipation
The riders ready for participation
The green flag waves for the start
The rider swallows his heart
The cycle begins, like it has before
Like the knights in days of yore
Not with swords or sabres
But with pistons and rotors
But the heart of the rider is the same
As the Knights who they became.
Its the thrill of the chances
They make look like dances
Its the way we feel our heart pound
As the pilots race around
The bikes become steeds
and the crowds feed on speed
The momentum is crushing
As the moments come rushing
The riders begin to deliver
What feels like a shiver
When at last it is done
And a rider has won
There is a feeling of celebration
and the crowd looks on in anticipation
okay done, i told you i wasnt creative. |
Oh, crickey, we've all been put in our place, now! Nice work, Tammerz...
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Originally Posted by Angela O WOW some hidden talent there you have Tammy....Well done, very good indeed.  If that's a weak attempt at poetry then we're in for something really special when you put your all into something!!! & if that's not creative then I don't know what is!!! _______________________________  Now for some help....
I'm stuck on a painting I'm doing. It's the one that was auctioned at the Day of Champions, you know for the winning bidder to have a photo taken with Valentino and then for me to paint it. Well I'm stuck already. 
I think that Vale is looking a little on the chubby side (his face) in it and there's something wrong with the mouth and left eye. The painting's not nearly finished yet, so don't worry about the hair, sunglasses clothes or background etc...they're just sketched in for now as a guide for when I paint them properly, but does the face need thinning and the eye and mouth sorting out .... am I right with this or is it something else that's making it look wrong?
I need fresh eyes to point out the mistakes to me. & don't just hold back with the comments thinking you're being mean pointing out the problems 'cos that's what I need....the wrong areas made obvious to me so I can fix them up and make it right!
The person who this painting is for has paid a lot of money for it and I'm sure he would want it to be done right.....so no holds bared, what's wrong with it? PLEASE!!!   |
I think it's because he's put his head back, whereas usual Rossi posture is slouching forward, neck forward... he rarely tucks his chin in like that, so it makes him look different.
I think his neck is a bit too thick... that's what gives it a "fatter" look, because i actually think you've nailed his features... the symmetry etc seems pretty much right on. And he does have a skinny kind of neck. (Cute skinny neck.)
The other thing... there seems to be a tension around his mouth... the smile looks a bit tight, not his usual easy looking smile. Now, this might be where you have to use artistic licence... cause if that is the half assed, tight looking smile he gave... to make the fan happy, should probably loosen his smile up a bit. Teeth possibly protruding a bit too much, so I guess the shape of his top teeth and the line they have not quite accurate.
Did Rossi seriously not take his sunnies off for the photo? What a dork. lol.
Nice work Angela... the fan that we can't see... how are they coming along?
Oh, and perhaps the position of his left shoulder looks like it's coming forward... putting his head back from his body even further... so it's an angle thing or something.