WOW some hidden talent there you have Tammy....Well done, very good indeed.
If that's a weak attempt at poetry then we're in for something really special when you put your all into something!!! & if that's not creative then I don't know what is!!! _______________________________ 
Now for some help....
I'm stuck on a painting I'm doing. It's the one that was auctioned at the Day of Champions, you know for the winning bidder to have a photo taken with Valentino and then for me to paint it. Well I'm stuck already.

I think that Vale is looking a little on the chubby side (his face) in it and there's something wrong with the mouth and left eye. The painting's not nearly finished yet, so don't worry about the hair, sunglasses clothes or background etc...they're just sketched in for now as a guide for when I paint them properly, but does the face need thinning and the eye and mouth sorting out .... am I right with this or is it something else that's making it look wrong?
I need fresh eyes to point out the mistakes to me. & don't just hold back with the comments thinking you're being mean pointing out the problems 'cos that's what I need....the wrong areas made obvious to me so I can fix them up and make it right!
The person who this painting is for has paid a lot of money for it and I'm sure he would want it to be done right.....so no holds bared, what's wrong with it? PLEASE!!!